we die forgotten
I am Pelenor


Cunning, not the feat of arms, brought fair Ilium low,
Unmasked Achilles gambit leading him to Troy,
And drove the knife into Iphigenia's breast
To ply cruel Artimus for fair following winds.
But the fates cut many lives short on Ilium's shores
Hopes of glory dashed for thousands who fought and died
Their shadows haunting Hades’ dark, lifeless halls:
Noble Hector no match for enraged Achilles,
Nor the son of Peleus, Paris' swift arrows,
Ajax won neither Achille's golden armor
Nor the mighty accolade ‘Greatest of the Greeks.’
He who fought with ruthless cunning over honor,
Crafty Odysseus, gained both, and the better man,
Forceful Ajax, fell upon his sword in sorrow,
His soul traveling the lonely roads to Hades’ keep.
But the gods' wroth ended not at the sack of Troy,
Agamemnon ruing his daughter's sacrifice
When his wife and her lover knifed him in his bath.
And he who deceived Troy with the horse filled with Greeks
Would spend ten long years failing to bring his men home....

Danger dogged our poor ship at every turning,
And after each our numbers shrank, first the cyclops
Then facing the ravenous six-headed Scylla,
And when we foolishly raided Helios's cattle.
But Circe's isle led to all the hell that followed....

Ravenous, like wolves, they entered my lodge, wretched
From suffering and want, wide eyed at my bounty
Meat and drink beckoned, yet their eyes strayed to my breasts.
But serving them Pramnian wine potent with herbs
I touched each with my wand, and lo, transformed to hogs,
Drove them with my staff to the pigsty for slaughter.
After, their captain, a lean, wily veteran
Entered my palace, the intent in his gaze veiled
And I passed a golden goblet of tainted wine
From which he drank deeply, before drawing his sword,
Pinning me to the wall, shouting ‘Restore my men!’
For some conniving god's magic protected him.
“I am goddess and cannot die though thy blade pricks,
Great King, sleep with me, which no man may dare refuse
For I can give thee pleasure thou hast never known.”
Slipping off my shift, his sword clattered to the earth
With my sorcery, he saw his wife Penelope,
And he wept as I led him captive to my bed
Till the dark shadows fell in the twilight gloaming,
And I restored his men to weep at their king’s feet....

Madness, blinding like a forsaken lover’s tears
Bridled Odysseus, and after, we his men .
Fair Circe’s magic bade us to forget our woes
And there long lingered we, shipwrecked by wicked spell.
Whilst we languished, Odysseus idled in love,
A long year mislaid, trapped upon her haunted isle
Feasting daily on meats and the sweetest of wines
Till evening when Circe bedded our captain
Whilst we dreamt of home, they lay in blissful embrace.
Eurylochus pled with Odysseus, ‘depart!
Beg Athena fair passage, for we long for home.
Ten years fought we in Troy and more did we survive
Poseidon’s wroth at sea and grave dangers on land
Have pity brave lord, remember Penelope
Let us set off for sea and fill our sails for home.’
Mighty Odysseus’s sanity returned
And begged Circe’s release and fair following winds
But in answer she gave a most perilous task
Her features shone Godlike, trembling he at the change.
‘King Odysseus, to house of Hades thou must go
And within its dark and terrible walls, a shade,
Of blind prophet Tiresias shalt thou inquire.
Dread Persephone hath whispered to him the means
For thou to return to Ithaca and thy home
Since wrothful Poseidon has sworn thy death at sea.’
But this learnt not I, till hearing my stout fellows
Prepare for sea whilst I lay drunk upon her roof.
Fearing they would depart and leave me lone behind
Leapt to my feet, slipping, fell and broke my poor neck,
Wraithlike I roamed, lost to oblivion’s terrors
Till finding Hades dark halls, and my way to thee,
Queen Persephone, fount of spring and light to all.
Whilst my brothers yet live and journey to these shores,
All cursed men, I fear they shalt soon join me in death,
Fools like me, followed Odysseus's mad quest,
Lo, my body unburied, my spirit unmourned
I beg thee upon my knees, let me be the first
To speak when my dread lord makes sacrifice to thee
Lest Thou also condemn me to lie unburied
And consign me to the depths in pain and sorrow....

I am the spirit and life of spring, Elpenor,
Birthed from my belly like a new babe from the womb.
Though wedded against my will, I am virgin still,
No prayer whispered in my name is left unanswered,
And no sacrifice of ewe nor bull unrewarded.
Though both fallen Greek and Trojan crowd our dark halls,
Neither Hades nor I deceived nor slew any.
Men should not be playthings in the god's petty wars,
Nor compelled to follow their kings mad for glory.
Thou alone, of both great and small shall entreat first....

Weeping, my men unfurled the sails and let wind guide
Rudderless, our heading known only to the gods.
On board one ram and a single black ewe, a gift,
An offering to Hades and Persephone.
Entered we a terrible, forbidding darkness
And saw the dead lands, the bourn from which none return
Where we made our sacrifice and called out its ghosts.
Lo, they came, moaning with pain and frightful to see,
Pale with fear I drew my sword and let none draw near,
The blood from the sheep for Tiresias alone.
But Elpenor’s spirit pressed through the moaning wraiths,
And I cried out with grief when I beheld his tears,
Elpenor, how come thee here through the great darkness?
For we came swiftly as if winged by a god's breath
Yet not as swift as thee whom waited to greet us.
‘Persephone, guided my terrified spirit,
And though I entered a trackless waste at my death
Her heaven born voice called my name and I followed.
Mighty Odysseus, listen now to my voice
Give heed to my speech, do not leave me unburied
On that wretched, evil isle, abandoned to woe,
Return to give proper burial and burn me,
With my breast plate, spear and grieves lament my passing.’
I wept with his poor ghost and swore to make it so.
He returned from whence he came; and saw him no more….

Entering again Hade’s broad, forbidding gates,
I saw King Agamemnon naked and cast down
His chest boiling with blood and cruel shame forever,
And mighty Achilles and Ajax together
The greatest warriors of the Greeks, denied their due
When death and Odysseus’s wiles conquered both.
The hope of glory, not the beauteous Helen,
Launched a thousand ships to the shores of Ilium
Where no glory would be found, only brute slaughter.
These horrors witnessed will torment me forever:
Poor King Priam’s ancient head dashed upon the wall,
Hector’s son cast from Troy’s heights to the rocks below,
The Trojan women raped and their children enslaved.
We slaughtered bulls to the dark bloodlust of the gods
Whilst the mighty strutted and preened, divided spoils,
Held games for the greatest to win Achilles armor,
Holding tight to their breasts the widows still grieving
The wine flowing like blood once had on Ilium’s shores,
The greatest crying out ‘We art the only men!’
Whilst we die forgotten, their names live forever….
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John Cox
Twisted writer of mind bending tales. I never met a myth I didn't love or a subject that I couldn't twist out of joint. I have a little something for almost everyone here. Cept AI. Ain't got none of that.
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Comments (20)
Highest accolades for this piece, John. Such a well-deserved top story and leaderboard placement; congratulations❣
Well-wrought! History is written by the winners as a tale of glory and by the losers as a tale of woe, but ultimately it is just another tale. "Names have been changed to protect the innocent."
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Congrats, John!
A Coxian retelling deserving of stage! loved the layering and like Rachel, how you flowed from one to another! trulyexceptional writing and storytellig! congrats on Top Story!
Good grief. I was seeing this on stage while I read.
I’ve been rather busy lately so I just got to this. A well deserved Top Story!
Congratulations on such a well deserved top story, John...wonderfully done, maybe you should take requests on retelling other stories in history...
This is such a powerful retelling. You really got the voice of the different characters down, especially Elpenor. It's easy to focus on the big names like Odysseus or Achilles, but giving a voice to the "forgotten" soldier who just wanted to go home and ended up breaking his neck while drunk is such a human touch. That final line about the "mighty" living forever while the rest die forgotten was a real gut punch. It’s a grim but honest look at how those old myths usually ignore the people actually doing the fighting and dying. Congratulations on getting Top Story with this.
I like the way that you shift perspectives through this like a baton is being passed. Your picture of Odysseus though, and his sad eyes is going to stay with me today. Great rendering, literal and pictorial, John!
Congrats Top Story
I kept thinking about Elpenor’s voice, especially the way he says his body is unburied and his spirit unmourned — that quiet fear of being missed felt more painful than all the heroic deaths you describe. The ending line about “we die forgotten, their names live forever” really landed for me, because it reframes the whole epic as something built on erased lives rather than glory. It made me sit with how many stories we inherit that never bother to look back at the ones left behind. When you were writing this, did Elpenor feel like the heart of the piece to you, or did he surprise you as the poem unfolded?
We who make the world work lay forgotten by those few who love us, as the world continues to write a new story. The line: ‘ Leapt to my feet, slipping, fell and broke my poor neck,’ Is no more than the FOMO many feel, yet miss what truly matters. I may be so far off from what you meant, yet this is my take Congratulations John once again for making our minds bend and think beyond the norm. And for top story
Congratulations on your top story!! Well done, as usual.
Epic as always. Excellent work
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
💖I immediately caught the allusions to the Odyssey and the Iliad. Your use of Blank Verse strengthens the ache that cunning act brought to Ilium. I noticed the Alliteration in 'fair following winds,' while the Assonance of 'Ilium's shore' slowed the tempo beautifully. 💖The 'Danger' section felt like stepping into thick mud due to the Polysyndeton of 'And' and 'Then'. The rise and fall of 'shouting: Restore my men!' was incredibly clean; the shift to a partial iambic meter made the command pierce through the palace scene.
This would make a great Humanities discussion or even a lecture portion.
This is epic, John! Yes, most men and women who carry the water for “leaders” die forgotten. But then maybe they leave their legacy in different ways.
This was so sad and written so profoundly. Loved this so much!