Coil
"Small Heat" Haiku Challenge Submission
The smudged glass froze fast -
A chewed up circular coil -
All we had - glowed red.
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Maura Bernstein
I'm a 37 year old writer and teacher living in MD. Constructive criticism and guidance is always welcome!
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Comments (18)
Don't actually use it anymore, just take it out to plug in the phone!
Congratulations! Nicely done haiku.
Yeah, I feel and see it. Nice job on a haiku. It's so hard to convey meaning and power with so few words and you did it wonderfully. Congratulations on your win!
This was beautiful and so full of warm, if I think a little achy nostalgia. Congrats on your win!
congrats on the well earned win
congrats on a great win!
Congratulations on your first place! 🎉Well deserved.
Loved the last line especially. Congratulations to you.
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Congratulations. Such a striking haiku & such a joy to read ✨✨
"all we had..." opens so much in the mind. i'm imagining the cigarette lighting and the first, extra-long drag one takes to forget the cold, the stress, the troubles. so very well done, congrats on your win!
Congrats on taking the #1 Slot, Maura!!! Excellent imagery and execution! 🤩
Congratulations on your win, Maura! This brings back memories of my childhood friend's mom.❤
very nice, love the old school lighter too!!!
Congratulations!
Congrats.
Congrats on your win. I miss car lighters.
Gorgeous, deeply feeling work in such a concise frame; a well-deserved winner, congratulations!