Crystal Rainbow Dance
The Unnecessary Line Poem
Dance in the reflection of the crystal mirror
inside a bright and shimmery room,
spin across the floor,
across the rainbows that are pirouetting with you
Snow falls outside in large wet grape-like drops, not stars of snow
Your bare feet move to the beat, your face is lit by rainbows
created by the blazing sun at the window pane where
faceted crystals hang in different lengths, slightly swaying
from your dancing feet, and breathy laughs,
the obsidian accordian skirt twirling roundly at your knees,
your scarlet sweater clings to your breast
His fingertips touch yours as you spin away, then you twirl back
the sun is setting, the sky darkening, and
shadows replace your dancing rainbows
The music stops, but your toes tap the beat while
his fingers snap to a rhythm, and his hips follow
Copyright © 2/19/2026 by Andrea O. Corwin
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Andrea Corwin
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Comments (7)
Love it!💕🌹💕
The whole poem makes it feel like your twirling in the dance, well done!
🌼The entire energy of this poem spoke to me in a gentle assonance; I could feel the deliberate way your mind chose words that provide a sense of solace. The line that truly stood out as "unnecessary" was: "Snow falls outside in large wet grape-like drops, not stars of snow".
This is vibrant and cinematic! I can see the light fracturing through the crystals and feel the warmth of that room against the cold snow outside. ✨
Very romantic and sensual, Andi!
Your descriptions were so vivid and evocative. Loved your take on this challenge!
I love this! I could feel and see the movement, and it reminded me of this dancing couple salt and pepper shaker someone had when I was growing up. In this line "but then you twirl back," my mouth wants to omit "but," somehow it feels tighter to me without it. Fantastic poem!