I sit by the bed and watch you breathe,
your chest, rising and falling
with the rhythm of my soul.
Your hand in mine,
a hint of a smile forms on your lips,
and I can’t help but wonder
if you’re inhaling memories
as you're exhaling time.
About the Creator
Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Heartfelt and relatable
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A perfect blend of sorrow and anticipation
Oof! That ending stung, but an honest curiosity to have. Great work, Cathy!
Congrats 👏 https://customer-opinion.top/writers/february-top-10-reads-list-for-vocal%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
So intimate and so lovely and so sad
OH, beautifully worded - with a touch of sadness 🥹💙
Good God, Cathy, your poems like this blow me away. I read this and think…in a few years… congrats on Leaderboard and great entry!!
What a finish. Love it.
Poignantly penned!!!💕❤️❤️ Congratulations on the Leaderboard Honerable Mentions!!!
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Yay Cathy!!! Congrats on honourable mention this week!!
I freaking love the last two lines especially! Awesome entry, Cathy! ⚡💙⚡
this is soo cute
What a poignant conclusion! This is a formidable entry, Cathy. Your competitors are uneasy.
Oh, Cathy! This is just the most fragile picture! I feel like I say this a lot on your pieces but it’s something that’s consistently striking to me, the final two lines are just incredible. You really know how to bring us into the moment and with those final lines leave us breathless
Well-wrought! Short and sweet, and the last two lines were especially magnificent!
This is so tender and heartbreaking, yet beautifully written. That last line—inhaling memories as you're exhaling time—hits right in the soul. Poignant and powerful.
Wonderful, I really like the last line.
Evocative of all that is heartfelt. I cannot help but wonder what memories flood your mind as you ponder theirs.
Inhaling memories and exhaling time, I especially loved that!
Those last two lines are something else. ❤️
Those final lines are amazing!
Gorgeous! I knew it would be from the title! Go Cathy Go!
Beautiful, Cathy
Cathy, this is incredible!! Heartfelt, breathtaking and just everything you want to encapsulate in the last moments of the best love of our lives!!
Cathy, those last three lines? Just sublime. Honestly. What an image.